Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But other say film should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It’s argued that the only reason of films is
means
Suggestion
a means
of entertainment, while others believe that it should a method of education.
Although
people mainly
Accept comma addition
people, mainly
watch
film
for relaxing after a stressful workday or studying
time
objective case of they
them
, I believe that films are
also
a great way to learn new things in an interesting atmosphere. On the one hand, some would argue that films are created for the entertaining purpose because men and women usually view a
film
in their leisure time to feel unwind. Movies and
film
series are both work of arts which help viewers to escape from the real world and the stress in real life.
For example
, a survey conducted in Vietnam CGV cinemas in 2018 showed that more than 70% of audiences
come
Suggestion
comes
to movie theatre due to feeling stressful and wanting to relax.
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that films should include educational content because most of viewers are young people and they can learn new things effectively than in school.
On the other hand
, others think that movies and television films should be a mean of education as young people can
also
obtain knowledge in an interesting method beside of school.
This
is because people can easily learn a new thing or raise their awareness while they are
enjoy
Suggestion
enjoying
the
film
in their leisure time
instead
of being taught by teachers.
For instance
, a study of the Oxford University conducted in 2017 showed that children can learn 40% faster by watching films than learning in a class.
Moreover
, raising public awareness about
global issue
Suggestion
global issues
the global issue
through movies and films is an effective way that governments and global organizations should consider to improve. In conclusion, despite watching films is a primary
recreation
Suggestion
recreational
activity after a burden in real life, I believe that moves and films
also
a great method to educate people, especially young people, in a vivid and exciting way.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

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