Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

We have witnessed the fame and the money that surrounds the movie or pop music stars. In recent years, the craze has even grown more than it ever was in the
last
decade. For
younger generation
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the younger generation
a younger generation
younger generations
, some of these celebrities are idols, but if they really enjoy a happy
life
, or not, is a different story. Some of them have a very sad
existance
the state or fact of existing
existence
and their stardom is
resonsible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
for it, up to some point. I personally think being famous has its own set of problems, which does affect these
star's
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stars'
lives very much. For starters, sometimes being popular simply means, the person is under the
survillance
close observation of a person or group (usually by the police)
surveillance
at all times. The more popular stars have media cameras recording every minute of their lives.
This
might seem like getting a lot of attention and importance
initially
, but soon it starts making people uncomfortable.
In other words
, imagine someone following you with a camera every single minute of the day. I am sure it would be a very unnerving experience. The fame blurs lines between the personal space and professional
appereances
outward or visible aspect of a person or thing
appearances
appearance
, which makes a person frustrated at times.'
Additionally
, their fame makes them
easy target
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easy targets
an easy target
for abduction, extortion and other similar crimes. They need to be under security all the time.
For example
, I have heard many film actors get calls threatening them for
life
, if they don't pay the ransom amount.
Also
, in personal
life
, it becomes difficult to identify, if the relationship they create, are really with genuine people, or opportunists who wants to use them for their personal gain. That being said, not all problems occur due to external factors. Some stars can't handle their success and it affects their personalities as some undesired traits like arrogance starts surfacing. These
type
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types
of qualities
starts
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start
pushing real friends away.
Also
, with success comes expectations,
which if
Accept comma addition
which, if
not managed, can lead to stress. In conclusion, even though being a famous star might sound like a
life
without complaints, it's actually far from it.
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