-children learn more by observing the behavior of adults.Do you agree or disagree?Give your openion with relevant examples.

It is stated that
behavior
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the behaviour
behaviour
of adults plays major role in the adopting and learning processes of the toddlers and
adoloscents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
.In my opinion
,
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,
I agree that adults influence the developmental and
behavioral
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
changes which occur in children. There is no surprise that why
doctor's
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a doctor's child
child
becomes a doctor,
Lawyer's
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the Lawyer's child
a Lawyer's child
child
becomes a lawyer or judge
so on
in the near future
soon
as we see so often in our world.
This
clearly points out that children during their developmental period are highly influenced by their surroundings.Kids frequently imitate the activities of the adults.
This
learning
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
can lead to a prosperous or
disasterous future
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a disastrous future
disastrous future
for the
child
. Considering good habits a kid develops in its early life
,
Accept space
,
for instance
seeing
at
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as
an adult waking up early and indulging in exercises and studies can lead to a bright future for the kid.
Similarly
like planting trees
,
Accept space
,
watering the plants
,
Accept space
,
feeding the pets,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
lead to positive outcomes for the
child
and
also
for the society.
On
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In
By
contrast
,
Accept space
,
unhealthy activities of an adult
leads
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lead
to a miserable life for children.
For instance
, consider smoking
,
Accept space
,
alcoholism
,
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,
drugs
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drug
abuse including
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abuse, including
the conflicts
,
Accept space
,
fights and crimes can lead to poor mental development of a
child
and increases the percentage of the world's Juvenile crime reports. Though
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of the adults has
vital role
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a vital role
in
childs's
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Childs's
child
life
,
Accept space
,
there are many other ways through which a
child
can learn.
For example
, 'trial and error method'.Considering an example where a toddler
touches
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touch
a hot vessel and withdraws his/her hand as quickly as possible.With
this
the
child
learns that he should never touch any hot material. In conclusion, there are many ways a
child
learns in its developmental
period but
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period, but
the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of adults influence more than any other mode of
child
's learning process.
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