Nowadays many countries have cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can government ensure that all these people live together harmoniously.

These days, big cities in most nations are inhabited by people of diverse nationality culture, and religion. If
not well
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not, well
managed,
this
could cause
civil crisis
Suggestion
a civil crisis
. Through enactment of laws against discrimination and adequately providing for the native people,
government
can make them live peacefully. Establishing an act against antisocial behaviours, especially estrangement of foreigners or any
descriminative
showing or indicating careful judgment and discernment especially in matters of taste
discriminating
attitude against visitors will go a long way to establish harmonious co- existence. When the core citizens know that there are grave consequences for maltreating or taking advantage of a stranger, they will not dare
doing
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to do
such
. In
this
way, both the citizens and foreigners
with
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to
live together with mutual respect.
For example
, Australia is highly cosmopolitan, yet the world most peaceful country.
This
is because they have laws that specifically protect the right of visitors in their country.
Furthermore
, if
government
Suggestion
the government
will sufficiently provide for the native people, peace will reign.
Wnen
Suggestion
When
Union
the citizens feel well catered for by their
government
, there will be less tendency for them to think that the foreigners are encroaching into their space, job, comfort, and success.
This
will mitigate
crisis
Suggestion
the crisis
crises
and xenophobia.
For instance
, the xenophobic attacks in South Africa
is
Suggestion
are
because South African citizens are not living good enough to accommodate visitors. They feel that the strangers are depriving them of some privileges due to them.
Hence
the fight against strangers. In conclusion, legislators should make laws to protect
forieners
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farmers'
farmers
right, and the citizens must be made very comfortable
by
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with
government
for there to be peace and harmony in cosmopolitan cities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cosmopolitan
  • inclusive policies
  • cultural exchange
  • integration
  • community centers
  • anti-discrimination
  • awareness campaigns
  • support systems
  • diversity
  • equal opportunities
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