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It is widely believed that people's ability to learn new things decreases with age and that companies should actively recruit younger employees who have great potential to learn. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Age
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 constitutes a veritable tool in maximizing output amongst employees in
labour sector
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the labour sector
. It is commonly believed by some that people’s capacity to acquire new things reduces with their
age
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.
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, companies are expected to employ younger staff to who have prospects to learn. I completely agree with
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 view and
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 essay will discuss in detail the reasons behind my opinion.
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, it is an established fact that younger people have a strong capability to learn new things on
daily basis
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a daily basis
 having regard to their
age
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.
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 is because their memories are still very alert and sharp unlike the older people who have faint memories in respect of
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 issues. The vivid example can be seen on the rationale behind retirement
age
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 for anybody in a government paid job. The retirement
age
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 for all ministries and government
parastatals
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 in Nigeria is 70 years.
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, employing younger persons by companies ensures a healthy labour force. It is an undisputed fact that the older one gets, the more he or she is prone to different kinds of ailments ranging from weakness of certain organs
to
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in
 failure of some organs.
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development invariably
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development, invariably
 leads to their absence at their various places of employment and thereby reduces the productivity of a company. In conclusion, I am
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 of the firm view that people’s capabilities to understand and acquire new knowledge of
things will
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things, will
 absolutely reduce with their
age
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 and
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 companies should employ staff that are younger in
age
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