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Modern building change the character and appearance of towns and cities.The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a change in the
way
 urban areas look because of the new type of structures being erected. While some believe that the rulers of nations should make it compulsory for new buildings to be constructed according to the old styles so as to safeguard their cultural heritage, others have a contradictory belief.
This
 essay will explain why climate change may affect the
way
 a building is made. On the one hand, some people are of the opinion that the appearance of buildings could preserve the culture because it makes it possible for a person to identify with a particular set of people
by
Suggestion
of
 the structures that are available.
For example
, the Benin people are identified by their clay houses which makes it easy to keep in touch with history and their
way
 of life.
On the other hand
, climate conditions make it necessary to create structures that can withstand certain
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 weather conditions which the old buildings cannot stand.
For example
, a recent study conducted in China reported that most of their new houses are made of wood which can be easily dismantled and coupled again
.
Accept space
.
This
 is due to the recent natural disasters being experienced there
,
Accept space
,
which requires people to move
houses
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house
 at the shortest notice. With
this
 new
structures
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structure
, people do not need to bother about having to rebuild, rather once the government gives them a new space, they can easily move their wooden structures to fit into their allocated portion.
Although
 some people are of the opinion that
government
Suggestion
the government
 should employ strict measures to ensure that new buildings take the shape of the traditional features, in order to preserve their
way
 of life, the change in climatic conditions will not allow for that. Conclusively, I believe buildings need to be constructed to
last
 through these new weather conditions.
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