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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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Food
preparation
 is a big task, especially when we have little
time
 to cook.
However
, these days it is easy to make our eatable with the help of ready to eat products. The processed
food
 manufactured by
food
 industries
are
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is
 prepared
food
 or easy to cook.
This
 trend
has impacted
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is impacting
 our daily life in many ways, which will be
discuss
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discussed
 in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,
use
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the use
 of manufactured
food
 from industries is the
time
 saving step in
this
 modern world and it benefits various
youth individuals
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youth, individuals
 who live out of home in metro cities for job purposes.
Majority
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The majority
 of the items are coming
in
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on
into
 the market in prepared
form
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form, thus
thus
 people have to add the mixture and cook,
thus
 saving a kitchen
time
 from raw
products
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product
preparation
. It helps an individual to utilize the same
time
 in other activities.
In addition
 to that, people who are not aware of
food
preparation
 can
also
 make their own
food
 with the guidance of company packed foods.
Secondly
, the excess eating of eating these prepared
food
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foods
can leads
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can lead
 to various side effects to our health. Eating these products lacks vital nutrients which makes the body sensitive to infections,
thus
 increase the life hurdles.
In addition
 to that, these products carry preservatives like mono sodium glutamate, which
also
 can have adverse effects on
individual’s brain system
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the individual’s brain system
. From the survey
by
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of
 nutritional department around 70 percent of
youth individuals
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youth, individuals
 are sensitive to infections because of routine habit of eating pre-cooked foods. In conclusion, it is irrefutable that,
food
preparation
 is not a difficult task today with the help of
food
 industries as they provide
readymade
made for purchase and immediate use
ready-made
 products for cooking
preparation
.
Although
, the adverse impact on health care should not
neglected
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neglect
 by the authorities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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