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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is true that
agriculture
 has currently been improved in many parts of the world, but some people are facing problems in order to supply food in developing countries. There are various possible reasons and measures that governments and individuals can take to address these problems. I believe that three main factors are to blame for people who are looking for food.
Firstly
, developing countries are
more probably
Suggestion
more probable
 to have the problems as they have not earned amplitude of money as well as enough knowledge associated with agricultural industries, so it would be impossible to supply enough amount of safe food by using advances facilities of
agriculture
.
Secondly
, environmental conditions
such
 as droughts and less fertilizer of farmlands can be considered as serious issues in term of
agriculture
 in some countries as Africa.
Finally
,
although
 some
third
 countries have applied the latest
agriculture
Suggestion
agricultural
 technologies, they rely on modern countries where export
agriculture
 facilities,
however
, some political problems might create difficulties in
this
 regard.
Therefore
,
agriculture
's products would be reduced and the rate of hungry increases. Individuals and wealthier governments are responsible for helping other countries to prevent hungry. Modern countries can invest in these countries.
For example
, they can try to support volunteer experts to develop the latest technology of
agriculture
 without any limitation as political problems.
Also
, if hungry countries where face environmental issues export their valuable natural resources, their economic conditions would improve, so they can import basic foods including
grain
Suggestion
grains
 to decrease hungry rate.
Finally
, wealthier can give some money to international charities with
aim
Suggestion
the aim
 of helping to poverty and hungry
people
Suggestion
People
. In conclusion, both national governments and individual must play their parts in helping poorer countries where hungry people are increasing
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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