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Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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 it is sometimes thought that schools ought to teach
children
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 to compete, other
people
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 believe that the focus should be on cooperation. In my opinion, I consider that competition helps
children
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 learn the most important skills for their future
life
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. On the one hand, some
people
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 think that
children
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 who learn to compete against each other often do better in school and I agree.
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, the competition between students motivates them to excel in their studies or tasks which
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 produces better academic performance and results.
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, students generally apply themselves and work harder when they are in direct competition with their classmates.
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, being driven to achieve the best is vital in order to succeed later in
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 when, as adults, they must compete against
others
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 in the job market.
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, it is often believed that it is better if the emphasis at school is on cooperating with
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. As
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people
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 we do not live, work or socialise apart from
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, so learning how to work alongside other
people
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 ought to be taught from childhood. Without these skills,
children
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 would lack the ability to communicate with each other or know how to deal with confrontations and conflicts in a constructive way. Another reason why team skills are useful for
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 is that they learn how to negotiate with
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 to complete a task.
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 is an essential skill to learn for their future
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. In conclusion,
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people
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 may vary in their opinions, I think that
children
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 stand a better chance to succeed both in school and later in
life
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 if they are encouraged to compete against each other.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strive
  • healthy competition
  • real-world competition
  • excessive
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • win-at-all-costs
  • detrimental
  • character development
  • empathy
  • communication skills
  • group efforts
  • individual talents
  • self-reliance
  • independence
  • balanced approach
  • competitive learning environments
  • cooperative learning environments
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