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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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School plays an important role in each every
person
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person's
 life, so do the parents. Almost all of us learn
lot
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a lot
 many of things in school, which we will implement
through out
all the way through
throughout
 our lives, One of
such
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thing
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things
 is discipline. Being a parent nowadays is a difficult task which each one of us is facing with our families. School making young students ready for how to become
an
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a
 good parent is welcome step. To be an example to kid(s), is a difficult task because of various factors like doing job, maintaining household expense, spending with kids and family.
This
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 cannot be learnt in a short while, but need
lot
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lots
 of information how to
tackel
accept as a challenge
tackle
 with different situations. Guiding
an
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a
 young people, by providing relevant information makes them to tune their mind and making them ready for becoming a parent.
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, just like sports time in school, if we have some time to make them learn regarding the duties of family members, it will be useful for future citizens. It not only make them
to perform
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perform
 their duties at home to cooperate their parents, but
also
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 reminds their duties when they step into their parents shoes. In Conclusion, Its
an
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a
 welcome idea to teach
this
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 generation how to become
an
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a
 good
parents
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parent
.
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