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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Everyone wish to have kids to build their family and carry their legacy. Very few wish not to have
children mainly
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children, mainly
 because of their financial or else some other unavoidable situations. Let's discuss
few
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a few
 of them below.
Firstly
, Financial situation, most of the families are below the middle class line. For them having a children
excatly
indicating exactness or preciseness
exactly
 is not burden but its
an
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a
 pain. They may not be in a situation to provide better food, shelter and proper education to them.
For example
, a person who is earning 1500 dollars per month, may not be in a position to have kids. Because of the income he is having, he may not be able to provide proper food.
Second
, Ample of children, in recent two decades, the
raise
a growth in strength or number or importance
rise
 in population is drastic. Food productivity is not
onpar
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on par
 with the rise of population. Even though there is growth in individual income still expenses are as so. Based on the statistics most of the families are having more than one kid. As both the parents are working they may not be in
position
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a position
the position
 to look after them if they are more than two. Maybe in
this
plural of "this"
these
 situations wife and husband
dont
do not
don't
 wish to have one more in the family.
Third
, Health Standards, Present health standards are not as in
past
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the past
. Our ancestors use to do
lot
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lots
 of physical activities which we are unable to do now. Based on
this
 point few may not be able to take care of their kids. In conclusion, above are the few which was discussed and maybe more which was unknown to us. Abortion should be legal and should respect one own view.
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