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Wealthy nation should assist poor countries with humanitarian relief. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered by many that rich countries ought to help poor nations when they become unable to meet their basic needs. I, personally, support with
this
 viewpoint; in the following paragraphs I will discuss elaborately that wealthy countries should continue their help in the form of humanitarian relief in order to make a
world
 with no hunger and to extend their business around the universe.
Firstly
, it is largely developed nations' moral responsibility to provide daily essentials to poverty-stricken nations. The help can be done by any means,
such
 as, by distributing emergency clean water, food and clothes. Rich countries are supposed to come forward to change the lives of destitute nations because they ruled those nations in the past; by smuggling their wealth, they made them poor nations.
Moreover
, rich countries are now leading the
world
 and they are now policy makers. To make a peaceful, happy and hunger-free
world
, they should help poorer nations so that these nations can prosper in every field.
Secondly
, usually, multi-national companies are run by wealthy nations. Those companies always look for new markets of their produced commodities around the
world
. If they assist
unprivileged
 nations to progress their lives, they have a chance to extend their market in those nations in future. Because when a nation prosper, they tend to spend on luxury and multi-national companies can take advantage of
this
 chance.
For example
, nowadays, China is assisting certain poor African countries so that they can extend their market in
near future
Suggestion
the near future
 in those nations. In conclusion, developed countries ought to continue their humanitarian help in destitute nations not only it is their responsibility but
also
 to increase their business in those nations.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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