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Do you support that the nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes? Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Give reasons for your viewpoint

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The
country
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 I am living in comprises nuclear
power
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 and had undergone several nuclear tests in history. They are one of the most expensive technology experiments that countries conduct and exhibit their
power
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 in the world. In my viewpoint, my
country
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 and other countries in the world should continue using nuclear
power
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 for innovation and experiments.
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 of all, countries use these technologies to protect their people from external threats and war zones. Nuclear helps in building new weapons and atoms for wars and to compete their opposition countries.
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, in Pakistan, nuclear is used to construct new weapons which help its army in fighting against the enemies.
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 to
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country
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the country
 grows when they conduct research and
then
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 experiment with
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 technologies like nuclear and thermal powers.
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, in
USA separate institution
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a USA separate institution
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 like NASA works on innovation and experiments to create new technological solutions to fight with the enemies.
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, some people believe that the use of nuclear
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 will cause extreme damages to the infrastructure of the
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, severe health diseases and environmental hazards.
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 as many years ago, in Hiroshima and Nagasaki, a nuclear explosion has caused breath taking diseases which not only affected the people living in that area but
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 the four generations coming after them. To conclude,
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despite health
 issues due to these nuclear powers, countries should use them in innovative and beneficial experiments for the growth of the
country
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.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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