Many people believe that social networking websites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree?

In the modern world, social networking websites like Facebook play an integral part in the life of an individual. These
websites
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web sites
have billions of users who are active online almost twenty four hours. I feel that these forums had negative effects on individuals and our communities,
however
, many users think that these collaborations have brought positive changes in our lives as well as in our society.
Firstly
, these websites
help
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helps
people to connect with friends and relatives who live at a distance or other parts of the world. They use plenty of options to stay in touch with the loved ones
such
as through video chats and messenger, by sharing photos, posts and feelings, showing check-in visits and liking
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
movies and songs. It
also help
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also helps
has also helped
in acquiring knowledge by joining groups of interests.
For example
, I have joined Canada Immigration Express Entry group on Facebook to gain knowledge and update information related to the migration process.
Similarly
, people can buy and sell products through these networks. FB pages are used by many online companies to share available deals, products and services.
For instance
, my neighbour runs her own online order-to-make accessories business through these
pages and earn in
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pages and earn
millions.
On the contrary
, many adults think that these sites
also
had hazardous effects on youngsters as it causes addiction to the digital devices. The major impact is on the quality family time as every family member is involved in a separate matter.
Moreover
, fake IDs and bogus messages
has increased
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have increased
security threats, fraud and internet theft like buying and selling pages do fraud to consumers by not
full
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fully
filling their commitments. One more drawback is cyber bullying which effects teenager's mind and psychological state as they get deep into complex and emotions. To conclude, despite of
many negative consequences
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the many negative consequences
I feel that advantages over weigh its disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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