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Many people today use their phones to communicate by sending text messages than talking. What are the reasons for this? Does it have advantages and disadvantages

In recent years, with the advent of technology, it has opened various avenues for
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 it is commonly believed by many that
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 over phone calls. The essay will
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discuss the reasons for it and will
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 state the disadvantages that it possesses.
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 busy work schedule and convenience. There
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 justifiable
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 that busy
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, communicating through
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record
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, a study done in the USA states that
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people
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 about communication with their colleagues,
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 they prefer
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messages
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 over making phone calls.
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, texting is not only easy but
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 a lot of time
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 when the prime purpose is to send a message across. There are several drawbacks related to messaging.
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, many
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times the
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 and can take away from the clarity of a message.
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, for effective communication and formation of
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, a pilot study conducted revealed that
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 messaging develop a habit of using
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 terms or short hands for communicating
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 leads to poor language skills.
To conclude
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,
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 busy with their work usually resort to communication through
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structure
Plan first; write four parts: intro, two body para, and a short end.
language
Use only simple word and fix the wrong word use, like 'evidences' and 'office going people'.
coherence
Use clear link words so ideas stick well, for example 'first', 'also', 'in addition', 'but'.
content
You give a view and explain why text is used.
examples
You give some evidence or idea as a example in your text.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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