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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country?

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A healthy person is known to be with proper diet, regular
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 and avoid stress.As there is saying "Health is wealth", I agree the point to some extent, not only following the above procedure to be fit but
also
 need to be happy and with positive thinking.
Let's
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
Lets
 discuss in detail about it below.
Firstly
, Diet, it's
consider
Suggestion
considered
 as the having particular
food
 items in limited quantity. Following it is important for everyone in order to be healthy. Our ancestors are
best example
Suggestion
the best example
 in
this
 situation. Major of them
haven't restricted
Suggestion
hasn't restricted
 their
food
,
instead
 they ate what are available to them and that too in limited quality.
Still they
Accept comma addition
Still, they
 are healthy and live long.
Secondly
, Workouts, Lot of individuals think, Who has well shaped body are physically strong. One who
never been
Suggestion
has never been
 to
gym
Suggestion
a gym
the gym
 is
also
 healthy without any major diseases.
For example
, People who are not performing any physical activities are
also
 living around us, without any illness.
Third
, Stress, One who is mentally fit without any psychological issues is going to live longer and better life. One who has mental tension is going to get
affect
Suggestion
affected
 their health because of lack of proper sleep and proper
food
.
Primarly
Suggestion
Primarily
 one should be
psychological
Suggestion
psychologically
 strong in order to be healthy. In conclusion, Apart from
food
, physical activities and
mental
Suggestion
mentally
 strong not only make the person
halthy but
Accept comma addition
healthy, but
healthy but
also
 need proper sleep along with caring from beloved ones.
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