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Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone far a job. To what extent do you agree with this?

#employers #focus #qualities #qualifications #someone #job
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It is a matter of debate that whether personal characteristics or
high
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higher
 education and
work
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experience
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 is better to get a high standard occupation. According to my point of view, qualifications and
job
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experience
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 is much important to select
a
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an
employees
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employee
 because if
applicant
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the applicant
 has
experience
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 related
to choose
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to choosing
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job
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a job
,
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,
 so he will
work
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 well as well as if he has qualified
then
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worker
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the worker
 has vast knowledge and have a creative mind.
Firstly
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, employers must look towards the record of
applicant
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the applicant
applicants
an applicant
, it is essential because if they give
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job
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jobs
 to that person who has no any
work
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experience
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beforehand
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beforehand, then
then
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 he will take some time to understand the logic of
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work
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the work
 and how to manage their
work
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 in
effective way
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an effective way
effective ways
. What's more, if he has
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experience
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experienced
,
that is
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 very beneficial for the development of that
company
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. Of course, he will bring profit to their employers.
Secondly
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, having a qualified worker for
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company
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a company
the company
 is profitable since he has vast knowledge which he will apply
for
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to
 the betterment of the
company
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. Apart from that, if
employee
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an employee
 of the
company
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 is well graduated, obviously he has a great intellectual power as well as have a creative thinking. With the help
this
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, runner of a
company
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 to complete their task or
work
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 he will do new experiment and choose
different path
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a different path
different paths
. So, it is really a good thing for that
company
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 in which
he
male possessive pronoun
his
work
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. To conclude, undoubtedly, applicants must need good behaviour with their colleagues as well as good communication skills,
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however these
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however, these
 qualities are not
main thing
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the main thing
 for getting a
job
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.
Instead
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 of
this
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, if someone has
experience
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 and good education so that they are perfect for any kind of
job
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.
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