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Some people say music is good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do u agree or disagree?

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Some individuals view
music
 as a great means of uniting people of diverse cultural backgrounds and ages together.
This
 essay completely agrees with
this
 opinion because
music
 not only improves human relationships but
also
 play therapeutic roles. A good reason why I agree that
music
 can bring people of different backgrounds together is that it makes people to relate
with
Suggestion
to
 each other better. As an example, people who share a common interest are more likely to listen to similar genre of
music
 when they meet with one another.
Also
,
music
 helps to cement relationships and foster better bonds when they are played at occasions.
For instance
, a popular musical carnival in my village brings together people of different age grades and culture to wine and dine together every year. The event is so enjoyable that many people look forward to attending with their friends who are
live
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living
 overseas. Another reason why
music
 helps is that, it has a therapeutic effect on the listeners. According to a quote by a popular American artist
,
Accept space
,
he said "
music
 is the greatest medicine of the mind and soul" and I concur because when people listen to
music
, they tend to forget their worries, many
dance
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dances
 away their sorrows on listening to their favourite
music
.
For instance
, many Nigerians I know, admits that whenever the popular
popstar
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pop star
, Akon, sings on stage they perceive a healing effect on them which eases their worry.
Hence
, they like to attend
such
 performances with their friends and family members. In conclusion,
music
, which has both the capacity to improve human relationships as well as therapeutic roles, is a powerful tool to bring individual of various origin and ages together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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