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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

#people #advertisements #products #lives
Advertising are basically to promote
particular company
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the particular company product
a particular company product
particular company products
product
. They are very attractive for
an
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a
 viewer, in order to increase their production. As most of us says, they encourage us to buy
an
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a
product
 while other's are
aganist
in contact with
against
 to it. Let discussion each
other view
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other, view
 point below. Coming to the view of promotions, encouraging us to have their
product
, I will neither agree with it nor disagree with it. Lets take an example of soap sales,
for
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in
this
 situation. If we go for
purchage
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the purchase
purchase
 of groceries, which includes soaps,
then
 we will
usally
under normal conditions
usually
 go for
an
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a
 known
product
. Because of the requirement, we won't go the one which we view,
instead
 if we are not satisfied with the existing one
then
 we tend to change the
product
. At that time, we
will choose
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chose
 these sort of body wash. Regarding the other perspective, we can accept
with
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to
 these people. Marketing main idea is to provide the information to their customers and leaving choice to them, whether they have to go for it or not.
Moreover
, some of offers from a company, may drive the consumers to buy their good's.
For example
, The Airlines company offered to and fro tickets with half of the regularly charged
price
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price, then
then
 we will not going to have it as they are
offering
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offered
. In conclusion, Both the ideas have their own positive and negatives. But everything was entirely dependent on the end user who is going to use it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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