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It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer

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On of the great early writer once said, "A
friend
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 in need is a
friend
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 indeed." If we are true companions than we will always be helping our
acqaintances
personal knowledge or information about someone or something
acquaintances
acquaintance
 in need. Some would argue that, we should not borrow
money
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 from a buddy, because it can harm or damage the friendship. Others think that there is no problem
in
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with
 borrowing
money
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 from a
friend
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untill
up to, before the time
until
 unless we
return
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 it on time. After weighing
evidences
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the evidence
evidence
 and considering all the aspects I personally feel that taking cash from a
friend
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 is not an issue. A
friend
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 can definitely borrow currency from other friends
it he
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it, he
 really needs it.
This
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 can be justified by following reasons and examples. Let's take an example of two very close
acqaintances
personal knowledge or information about someone or something
acquaintances
acquaintance
. One of them is rich and
other
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the other
 is very poor and can't run his family and sometime may need
assest
having help; often used as a combining form
assisted
 from the fortune
friend
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. In
this
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 case the
friend
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 who is poor can ask the prosperous
friend
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 for
money
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 to overcome his current problems and
crysis
an unstable situation of extreme danger or difficulty
crisis
, and
when ever
at whatever time
whenever
 he has enough
money
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 he can
retrun
go or come back to place, condition, or activity where one has been before
return
 it back to his ally.
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, I feel that, If the poor
friend
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 will be able to
return
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 the wealth back to his
friend
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then
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 their alliance and bonding will become stronger. Similar to above example, consider an example of an unfortunate situation, where one of a or one of a family member of your
friend
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 suddenly meets an accident or a tragedy. He
ask
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asks
 you for currency. Assuming that you have sufficient
money
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, and if you are sure that the
friend
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 will
return
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 it back when he is able to recover from
this
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 unfortunate situation
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
, will you
not provide
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don't provide
aren't providing
 him with the required
money
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. I personally feel, that I will definitely provide him with the
money
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. Others might cite, that it is not a good idea to acquire cash from mates because it may harm the affection. They might even provide reasons for supporting
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 argument, but I am very much inclined and having a feel that it is the
mutually
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mutual
 understanding of friends which keeps them close. Ultimately, after weighing instances and considering both sides of the issue, I want to conclude that, there is no harm in borrowing
money
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 from friends
untill
up to, before the time
until
 unless the reason for borrowing
money
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 is genuine and we
return
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 it back on time.
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