As a country develops, people tend to buy more cars. Do the advantages for the individual outweigh the disadvantages for the environment.

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usually purchase more

cars

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when a nation progresses. In my opinion,

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for them as it is convenient and useful in daily use but

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few drawbacks to be taken into account. Admittedly, there are some obvious benefits of buying a car.

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, it is very convenient to use when you have a big family.

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, if a family

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of four to five

people

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, it

oftens

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becomes difficult to travel together from

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place to another. Public transport might be a solution but not all the

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if a family of more than five members buys a car, they can comfortably move

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needed.

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,

cars

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can be used in harsh

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during summer when the temperature is extremely hot. Since

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conditioners can be installed in

cars

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,

one

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can avoid the heat outside.

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,

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can protect themselves from

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from the weather.

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, there are some crucial disadvantages which cannot be ignored.

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of the main disadvantages is the effect of smoke emitted

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cars

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and other vehicles. These gases

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in the

air

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and

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pollution.

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will not only harm the respiratory system of

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but

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serious effects on the environment.

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, the ozone layer, which protects us from

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harmful rays, is becoming thin. The other vital drawback is the congestion which is caused

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the increase in the number of

cars

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on

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. Heavy congestion on roads creates major difficulties for

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.

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, extreme traffic on roads causes

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for an ambulance to reach

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hospital on time.

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, the patient might lose his life.

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, I think though we have many benefits with

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but

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the drawbacks

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as pollution and congestion are more important than the advantages.