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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country.

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Tourism is the growing industry in many
countries these
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countries, these
 days and
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 it supports diversity among different cultures. It brings a number of benefits, both financial and non financial to the
country
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;
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, there are certain detrimental effects of it too.
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 essay will discuss both and will suggest a plausible opinion based on practical justification. Most importantly, promoting tourism brings foreign exchange to the
country
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, which in return helps to improve foreign reserves and balance of payment of the
country
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. It helps in making foreign debt payments easily due to high foreign reserves.
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, it promotes and develops other industries associated with tourism
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 as hotel and hospitality. People get more employment due to the increasing demand for
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 services,
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, People serves in the capacity of tourist guide and earn a handsome amount by guiding visitors of the renowned places to visit.
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Furthermore government
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Furthermore, government
, in order to support
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 industry spends huge money to attract more and more of
tourist
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a tourist
tourists
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 as building road, bridges and more recreational places
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 as parks and
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 improves aver all infrastructure of the
country
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also
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 benefiting the society in general.
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contrast, despite of
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contrast, despite
 having many merits, it
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also have
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also has
 few demerits
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 as in
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country
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countries
a country
 like Pakistan, where political conditions are rarely stable and
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 adversely affects the
country
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’s reputation, as with uncertain security situation people lives are at greater risk, and
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 in case of any mishap it
discredit
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discredits
 the
country
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’s
honor
bestow honor or rewards upon
honour
 as well as seriously affects associated industries, especially when people
avoids
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avoid
 visiting
country
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 due to security issues. Another issue is the cultural shock for people from both the sides, especially the local people of the
country
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, who may not
whole heartedly
without reserve; without reservation
wholeheartedly
 welcome and accepts foreigners.
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 negative attitude
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may also discourage
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 discourages visitors to mingle with them and learn more about their local culture and gain much more information which may be their prime purpose of
visiting
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the visiting country
country
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.
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example there
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example, there
 are many tourist writers who keep exploring new places and cultures and write about them;
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 may be de-motivating for them to visit
next
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 time. In conclusion, in order to gain benefits of tourism,
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country
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the country
 has to overcome the hindrance in its way. Having said all the disadvantages, the advantages overweigh over the disadvantages as these minor issues can be overcome by providing education to the society of its merit to the state as well to the public at large.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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