Question: over population of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individual can tackle these problems.

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It is no longer news that most
cities
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city
centre
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centres
are over crowded.
This
has brought about some challenges and most worrisome among these problems are poor housing and
pollution
.
This
essay will explain the problem and suggest ways government and individual can address them. Lack of good
housing
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house
system might be probably the worst challenge facing urban areas.
This
is because as people migrate from their local communities in rural and suburban settlement, it is impossible to carry along their houses.
Also these
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Also, these
migrants are actually of lower class whose aim of coming to cities is to seek
elevation
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the elevation
of their standard of living, so they could not afford to build
decent house
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a decent house
or hire one. The option available for them
is find
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is finding
has found
a place in the shabby area of the city without essential facilities like drainage system or toilet.
This
kind of area is often even
over crowded
cause to crowd together too much
overcrowded
and unhygienic.
In
addition
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addition, pollution
pollution
is the
second
worst problem of city centres. Indiscriminate dumping of
waste
everywhere due to lack of space for proper
waste
disposal pollute the land and cause visual disturbances as well. The middle and upper class
occupy
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occupies
the roads with private cars of which the carbon emission from these vehicles causes air
pollution
. Both land and air
pollution
are capable of causing health hazard to people. Turning to solution now, the government can tackle the challenge of poor housing by proper urban planning
,
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,
taking down poorly constructed accommodation and build apartments and making the cost of renting affordable. Laws should be made to prevent indiscriminate
waste
disposal but
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disposal, but
that can only be effective if a proper
waste
management system is put in place
first
. For the individual, it is important to take responsibility for a healthy society by making sure every house built has necessary
convinence
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convenient
convenience
conveyance
facilities. They should obey
law
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the law
of proper
waste
disposal and avoid using cars when possible. All in all, urban over population has several challenges but it can be solved or at least reduced by government action and individual.
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