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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position

#company #factory #community #influence #support #position
people
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People
 have argued about the proposal of building a new plant near the residential area. Some people
argue to that
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argue that
 it will bring
alot
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a lot
 benefits to the local society, while others think it will have a negative effect on their surroundings. The
followin
about to be mentioned or specified
following
eassay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
Esau
essays
 will discuss in
detailes
true confidential information
details
 about the advantages and disadvanges of it.
One on the hand
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On the one hand
, it is true that
constucting
make by combining materials and parts
constructing
 a new business unit near the local residential zone will bring
alot
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a lot
 of benefits to many parties.
Firstly
, It will create
alot
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a lot
 of job
oppertunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 to the local people. It is common that a factory will absorb many employments, and for
efficency
the ratio of the output to the input of any system
efficiency
, it will give
prority
status established in order of importance or urgency
priority
 in the hiring local people.
Secondly
, the scenario will boost the
econamic
of or relating to an economy, the system of production and management of material wealth
economic
 development of its locality. Many investors will build a mini market, gas stations and restaurants as many of the cooperative workers will seek these
commertial
connected with or engaged in or sponsored by or used in commerce or commercial enterprises
commercial
commercials
 places.
Therefore
, It will positively
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the real estate business of the surroundings as well.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable plan that could
brings
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bring
 negative effects to society and to the climate. It is a fact that many factories are generating waste and they could create
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
 effects to the local ambiance.
For instance
, the waste water from the manufactory might be flown
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the local river and contaminated the surrounding environment. And
then
,
factory
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the factory
factories
might generates
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might generate
 some
smonkes
a cloud of fine particles suspended in a gas
smokes
, which might be a treat for the local people. These people might have some serious respiratory problems due to inhaling polluted air.
Consequently
, there should be a clear regulation and strict monitoring over it in the future. To sum up, it is a fact that
aim
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the aim
 of
buiding
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
building
guiding
bidding
 a commercial enterprise near a residential spot will create some pros and cons. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 do believe that the positive sides of the way outweigh the negatives, as long as plan follow the government regulations and it is clearly monitored by the authorities.
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