In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyle of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Owing to the change on the people's eating habits and their way of living especially, children.There are some who believe that

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change have a damage impact on their health or life in general.In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that many children are in danger due to, their unhealthy eating habits.

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a young person of either sex

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, their parents allowed them to do that.

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children have been

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with several diseases and the main reason of that was their eating habits.

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example, diabetes.I have a cousin who age ten years old and has been diagnosed with diabetes.His mother used to give him sweets and fast food every day.

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an occurrence of something

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out of millions of children who

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undergo or be subjected to

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because of their unhealthy

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a prescribed selection of foods

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tend to be overweight than the other children in their age.Indeed, the rate of obesity among children has increased in the

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fifteen years.

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the high increasing in the number of the fast food restaurants, not just

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, adults

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will rise about 2.5%, each

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, mean that in the future most people will

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from obesity. In conclusion.Parents need to be more responsible for their

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health.They should ensure that their children are eating well.Beside that, they need to encourage them to do more outdoor exercises

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can have a great effect on their health as well as, eating healthy.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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