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The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

#crime #rate #offenders #parents #skills
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Family environment and upbringing has a huge impact on the psychology of a child. It is the value system they are brought up in that
shapes
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 their personalities. I completely agree that parenting
skills play
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skills, play
 a major role in how children behave in society. Many studies point to an unhappy childhood as the root cause for juveniles committing acts of
crime
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. Parenting skills
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are
 an ignored topic in many societies. Learning how to communicate better with children is a skill that needs nurturing and development over time. One needs to understand the impact that bad parenting can have on children. In recent years we have seen a rise in Juvenile
crime
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 could be due to families becoming more nuclear and not having the support or wisdom of elders in the family. There is
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 an increasing trend of both parents working which can make a child feel alone and disconnected from the family. Given these circumstances, it becomes essential for parents to communicate well and to plan their schedules effectively. These skills are not viewed as essential by a lot of parents.
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 can have a negative impact on the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of a child and cause feelings of depression, anger and sadness. If these feelings are left unaddressed, they can escalate into acts of
crime
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. For a harmonious and peaceful society, every individual needs to contribute and develop the future generation is a task that starts at home.
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, teaching parenting skills to parents is the right approach to decreasing the
crime
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 rate of young offenders.
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