In the past people liked to store knowledge in books. However, in the present, we prefer to store knowledge on the Internet. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

Books have not avoided the process of modernization.
Thus
, nowadays people keep
information
not in
paper
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the paper
, but in digital storages on the Internet. I believe that
this
has more benefits than drawbacks. There are certain disadvantages connected with storing
knowledge
on the Internet.
Firstly
, because the Internet keeps billions of
information
units, it is often difficult to find
reliable source
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a reliable source
reliable sources
that can be trusted.
For example
,
such
a situation leads to a rise of
gutter press
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the gutter press
that with the help of the Internet can spread not proven
information
all around the world.
Secondly
, keeping all the
information
on the Internet, we are making the process of plagiarism and infringement of copyright easier. As
result
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a result
, books get downloaded without giving
credits
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credit
and money to an author. Despite
this
, there
are
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is
the number of advantages. By storing
knowledge
on the Internet and not in physical books, we are making the process of
knowledge
and skills obtaining easier.
Couple
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A couple
of decades ago, people needed to have money to get necessary
informaton
a message received and understood
information
. Now, nearby with pay-per-view
webpages
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web pages
, there are thousands of free sources everyone has access to.
Moreover
, books are not reliable in comparison with modern technologies.
For instance
, in the wide range of countries in different periods of time
knowledge
stored in books was eliminated because new governments in these countries
were not agree
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didn't agree
did not agree
haven't agreed
have not agreed
were not agreeing
weren't agreeing
were not agreed
with
authors' point
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the authors' point
of view and these books were considered as a threat to their political regime. If there had existed the Internet in those times, a lot of
knowledge
would have been saved. Summing up, I stick to the opinion that
advantages
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the advantages
outweight
be heavier than
outweigh
disadvantages because they are proving that the Internet helps
knowledge
to be saved and multiplied.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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