Essay Topic: Some people think that giving money as gift to teenagers is good while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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This
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essay is about to giving
money
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as
gift
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a gift
to young and teenagers, but many of them are
disagreed
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disagreeing
.
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Although
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Despite
its tradition in many
countries especially when
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countries, especially when
youngsters are achieving some targets, or completing their studies, they expect to receive some gifts and surprises from their elders.
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its definitely important to enhance their confidence and
moral
a state of individual psychological well-being based upon a sense of confidence and usefulness and purpose
morale
. I am
strong advocate
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a strong advocate
of
this
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approach to give
money
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as surprises on different occasions
instead
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of other gifts When we talk about presents for teenagers, they get
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
excited and will put more efforts in their targets,
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,
its
it is
it's
significantly important to build their interest. In
term
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terms
of gifts, there will be many options
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as, offering them a mobile, game stations, but they will be more excited and cherish for the
money
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.
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, we could even arrange dinners and parties at home on achievement’s, but with the provided
money
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, they can arrange and use the
money
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in their own way.
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, they might be interested to spend
money
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with their friend’s, during the school or university tours.
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, the
money
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will give them
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
opportunities
to enhance their ability to think, how and where to spend.
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, many elders aren’t in the
favor
promote over another
favour
fever
of
money
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for teenagers, they might be thinking it’s not safe for the child’s, to not lose control on them. Because when the teenagers can have
money
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, many in their younger age are immature and careless sometimes, which might lead them to wrong directions. After the thorough discussion, about the both
point
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points
of view, in conclusion, they both somehow right with their technical analysis and point of view. So, the decision depends on the situation and the teenager age.
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, in my opinion, I would say that,
yes it’s
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yes, it’s
better to give them
money
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, for their confidence and to earn their trust, for better growth and healthy environment.
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