some people believe teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects, even ones they do not enjoy. others, however, believe that teenagers should only focus on the subjects they are best at or find most interesting. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today's competitive world, a broad knowledge is needed to succeed in any field. Different people have different mindset. Some section of society deem that teenagers should learn all
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subjects, even they do not enjoy, whereas, others opine that they should only focus on those subjects which they find most interesting or they are best at. The following paragraphs would shed light
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preceding all others in time or space or degree
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level. Nowadays, the job market is very demanding and the recruiters select students who are skilled in various
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, a basic knowledge of mathematics is needed to excel in computer language.
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make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
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the interest
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, during my
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days my history teacher was so good that a boring subject like history was the favourite subject of the whole class.
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, there is an eminent adage that says, "beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder'',
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, others believe that students should not have to
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all the subjects and should be allowed to choose the subjects they want to
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that in
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case the students will probably be more enthusiastic about their
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all the subjects not only they will
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fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
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they will be constantly under a lot of pressure.
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, there was a survey done by the times of
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India
in 2013 which stated that around 5000 students behind every million of
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the students
suffered from hypertension due to a lot of pressure during studying plethora of subjects at the same time. In conclusion, it can be said that as "every coin has two sides'', in the same
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manner, both
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groups
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentrate
  • school subjects
  • enjoy
  • focus
  • best at
  • interesting
  • benefits
  • well-rounded
  • education
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • discover
  • interests
  • talents
  • depth of knowledge
  • specialization
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • career paths
  • balanced approach
  • foundation
  • individual strengths
  • passions
  • opinion
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