In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence.

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In the past families consisted of a father who went out

for

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work and a mother who took care of the children,

however

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this

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trend has changed in the recent times. To live comfortably in a world with growing expenses, sometimes

both

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parents have to earn.

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situation has given rise to the constantly debated topic of whether children are benefited or feel the lack of support due to the

parents

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parents'

parent's

absence. In

this

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essay, I will discuss the two views and justify as to why I believe

both

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the opinions are right. On the one hand, children

are greatly benefited

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have greatly benefited

greatly benefit

from the additional income. They are sent to good schools with the best possible facilities to receive and education. Children are given all the comforts of life like an A/C, good clothes and food, so that they wouldn't have to struggle and can

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focus on their future.

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is seen in most metropolitan cities, where

students including

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students, including

myself, usually have employed parents.

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, certain harmful effects may arise. Children feel neglected, which leads to them partaking in several undesirable activities. Due to the lack of supervision they can indulge in teenage drinking, drug abuse and bullying. Evidence of

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is visible in the increase of underage drunk drivers where the young adults are usually from households with working parents. In conclusion, I believe that

both

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these point of are

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these points are

these points of are

this point of are

justified in their own place. A child can receive the best of

both

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worlds if the parents have a good work-life balance,

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being able to support the child

both

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financially and emotionally.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

267 words

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dual-income household
financial stability
extracurricular activities
role models
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emotional well-being
work-life balance
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In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important for everyone including young people, to save money for their future. What extant do you agree or disagree with tihs statement?

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons…experience.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with the notion that changing one's perspective on stress can lead to a healthier response to life's challenges?” You should give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge to support your response.