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Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people say it leads to environment damage and should be stopped. To what extent do you agree?

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Industrial
growth
, which is the sign of economic
development
, has brought a positive impact to some countries in the world by lowering the
number
 of poverty.
Hence
, some people believe
this
growth
 should be discontinued because it can harm the environment. I
am personally disagree
Suggestion
personally disagree
 with
this
 idea. So, in
this
 essay, I shall prove that the environment damage caused by industrial
development
 can be minimised without stopping its
growth
. On the one hand, the
growth
 of industry in some countries all over the world has contributed to decrease the
number
 of unemployment.
For example
, in China, people who do not have any formal education background can still get a job because industries there require a huge
number
 of human resources. The increasing
number
 of employment in line with the declining
number
 of poverty and criminal cases in China.
On the other hand
, some irresponsible industries throw away their
waste
 directly to the surroundings without doing the proper procedure for the
waste
 management.
For example
, Shanghai, a town in China, has been nominated as the most polluted city in the world.
However
,
this
 problem can be solved if the government forces the industries to obey the lawsuit regarding
waste
 management system. To conclude, economic
development
 has caused a negative impact to the environment. Fortunately,
this
 issue can be minimised by implementing the
waste
 management procedures. I believe, the benefit of industrial
growth
outweigh
Suggestion
outweighs
 its drawback. The discontinuation of the
development
 of
economy
Suggestion
the economy
 can lead to unemployment, poverty, and criminal convictions, which is harder to be solved.
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