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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefit the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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People have differing views when discussing about what to eat best to keep them healthy and fit. While others think that excluding
meat
 and fish
on
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to
 their diet will provide
better result
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a better result
better results
, I disagree with the given suggestion. On the one hand, there are some great reasons why some supports
this
 idea. For one, there are
group
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a group
groups
 of people who are strong advocates of promoting the rights of these species. These individuals believe that, if people eat
this
 kind of
food
, they likely support the industry which promotes animal cruelty. Another reason is that,
meat
 consumption is expensive.
For example
, eating stakes or baby back ribs on a restaurant will cause you an arm and leg;
therefore
, they think that it is practical to eat vegetables because it saves money and everyone could easily plant these on their garden or backyards.
On the other hand
, I do not agree with
this
 and in my opinion
food
 preference varied in every person.
Firstly
, eating
food
 should be a rewarding experience. Not all people enjoyed eating vegetables because they find the taste as weird or bitter. To elaborate most children do not see vegetable as edible for a meal which sometimes compared to chewing a medicine.
Secondly
, in some race, culture, tradition or religion; the practice of eating
meat
 is a part of their celebration.
For instance
, in the United States of
America they
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America, they
 held an annual national thanksgiving which is a special gathering with a
turkey’s
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turkey
meat
on
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in
 the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
counter
 of their tables. In general,
although
 some have
strong argument
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strong arguments
a strong argument
 to support the idea to exclude
meat
 and fish on their diet, I disagree and believe that people should respect one’s choice of
food
 because it varied across every
people
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person
, religion, race, culture and traditions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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