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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism brings more advantages or disadvantages to a country?

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Tourism
has improved
Suggestion
is improving
 so much these days and there has been an increase in the
number
 of people travelling around the world.
This
 has both advantages and disadvantages and
this
 essay will discuss both the view points and why I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 in the former argument. On the one hand, many people argue that
tourism
 is causing detrimental effect on the country. As the
number
 of visitors
increase
Suggestion
increases
, the culture and lifestyle of people are affected since they are forced to welcome tourists. Many poor nations use
this
 as a means of living and they are even ready to change their food habits
inorder
Suggestion
in order
 to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
 foreigners. Another aspect is the change in environment. Many forests and natural reserves are destroyed to make resorts and beaches thereby affecting the natural ecosystem.
On the other hand
, I believe that development in
tourism
 is a positive move. As the
number
 of people visiting a country grows, the economy will naturally improve.
Moreover
,
inorder
Suggestion
in order
 to entertain visitors, governments make better transportation and housing facilities and
this
 improves the country's standard of living.
For instance
, Kerala is a small state in
India which
Accept comma addition
India, which
 was unknown to outsiders. Now, a huge
number
 of people are able to visit
this
 place and due to the scenic beauty,
this
 place is called God's Own Country. Another advantage is that
tourism
 has helped to make the people more aware of other countries which help them to appreciate other culture and tradition To conclude, every change has both positives and negatives and
tourism
 industry is no different from
this
. Even though there are disadvantages, I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that the positive aspects outweigh
this
.
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