Some people think museum should be enjoyable place to attract and entertain young people. other think the purpose of museum is to educate not to entertain.discuss both the views and give your own opinion

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There has been and
ongoing debate
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the ongoing debate
regarding that several people have thought museums is an enjoyable place as well as
interest
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younger generation. While
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,
a group of people believe that it is education purpose to use
museum
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not to entertain.
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, both the views are discussed
further
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. My inclination is justified in
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the ensuing paragraphs
. Discussing on the
first
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view, people
are believes
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are believing
are believed
believe
museum
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for
entertain
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entertaining
purpose.
They
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The
enjoyable moment for so the antique items as well as many more about how to lives past life
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,
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museum
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museums
the museum
are
place
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places
a place
the place
for
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of
interest
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to collect the old item
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few decades by younger
generation attract
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generation, attract
the collection of past
history
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and enjoying their moment. They
are gives
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are giving
the
information
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about
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last century
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the last century
to use the equipment for cultivating and wars.
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this
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, they
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give some different culture lifestyles.
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,
digvijay
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is a visit to the
museum
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.
they
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They
enjoying
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are enjoying
enjoy
are enjoyed
the some video presentations about
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history
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the history
and
also
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different culture living style.
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, there are more benefits
to
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of
education. So, another group of people
believe
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believes
some
museum
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is only education purpose not entertain
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is only education purpose not entertaining
is only education purpose not entertain
.
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,
history
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about the
information
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of
last
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decade activities.
nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
Nowadays many
competitive
exam
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exams
are focused
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focus
on a
history
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of nations. To exemplify,
khushi
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Khushi
is a preparing the government exam.
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, they have more knowledge about
history
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also
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they known Many
collection
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collections
of item to store particular
museum
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. To recapitulate, it can be
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committed
museum
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is a
best
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good
place
for
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of
interest
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to collect for past
information
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as well. Either
gives
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give
information
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about past or entertain our self depend on
interest
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.
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