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Some people believe they should keep all they money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that they should rather save their money than pay tax to the state. In my
opinion I
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opinion, I
 disagree with
this
 statement and believe that through the payment of taxes life is improved.
This
 essay seeks to discuss
this
further
. The primary reason why the people pay taxes is to support the
government
 in providing social amenities which individuals or private firms may find very difficult to provide solely.
Also
,
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,
most individuals find it difficult to afford
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fees and health care. Through taxes
,
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,
quality education and health care can reach the poor.
This
 in turn improves quality and standard of living.
Furthermore
, taxes paid by people during their active service years grants them access to
medicare
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Medicare
medicate
 during retirement.
In addition
, most aged people end up staying in the care homes which are funded by the
government
. It is irrefutable that most times individuals prefer to keep their money for personal use and believe that the
government
 can generate funds through other means and not taxes.
In other words
, these people provide their basic needs or patronize private establishment
such
 as schools,
hopitals
a health facility where patients receive treatment
hospitals
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 for services.
Also
, they may feel
skeptical
denying or questioning the tenets of especially a religion
sceptical
 about paying taxes because of miss use of
fund
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funds
 by the
government
. In conclusion, payment of taxes enables the smooth running of the state and ensures eradication of poverty in the society as everybody
also
 benefits from amenities provided by the
government
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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