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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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In recent times, the number of young people who follows
news
Suggestion
the news
 is decreasing at an alarming rate. They neither read newspapers, nor watch TV news. The main reason for
this
 is the change in attitude they have towards society. In my opinion, the ideal solution for
this
 is to incorporate general knowledge in school curriculum and make children aware of the importance of knowing what is going around the world. There are multiple causes for
this
 of which the most important one is the attitude today's generation has towards the world. They don't care about what is happening around them and they are not interested to know the day to day activities of their own country.
Majority
Suggestion
The majority
 of the youngsters spent most of their time
in
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on
 social networking sites
such
 as Facebook and they find watching or reading news as a waste of time. At the most, what they read is sports related articles, which they find amusing.
Besides
this
, many often find reading serious articles as boring and uninteresting. One solution that can help to cater a change is to have general knowledge as a mandatory subject in schools itself.
This
 will ensure kids grow up knowing about the world affairs and they will try to
make
engage in
do
this
 as a habit when they grow up. Once we are used to reading news, it will become a hobby and will benefit in the long run. Another way to make sure
this
 is to create awareness campaigns in schools and local communities so that children as well as parents know the importance and benefits of news.
For instance
, if someone is not ready to read, they even have the option to watch
television which
Accept comma addition
television, which
 is much more entertaining and serves the purpose. To conclude, as a responsible citizen, we are ought to know about national and
wordly
Suggestion
world
worldly
affaires
matters of personal concern
affairs
 and news is the best and only way for
this
. Lack of interest is the main issue that we see these days and in my opinion, authorities should make sure people have the right guidance and means to be knowledgeable.
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