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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays young people are not into reading newspaper or listening news on TV. I agree to the point as per my opinion young people are more into other
activites
any specific behavior
activities
 like playing games, hanging out with friends, and watching movies etc.
Firstly
, the causes of
this
 are young people want to see the exact matter. When they watch
news
Suggestion
the news
 it is more about advertisement of various brands, sometimes leading to 10 to 15 minutes of
continous
continuing in time or space without interruption
continuous
 showing. Due to that anyone can loose interest in news which was shown at that
time
.
Furthermore
, young people are more busy in their own life as these
days
Suggestion
day's
competition
Suggestion
competitions
 as been
errupted
start abruptly
erupted
 in all fields. To compete, everyone has to be prepared in their chosen field, it could be their job or studying. Solutions to the above as per my opinion are, news channels should play news content the most. If they are showing
news which
Accept comma addition
news, which
 is important at that
time
 advertisement should be avoided.
Advertisement shown
Suggestion
The advertisement, shown
The advertisement shown
 should be maximum of 2 to 3 minutes for in half an hour if necessary.
Secondly
, young people should spare
time
 from their busy schedule
atleast
Suggestion
at least
 to read newspapers as there will be no advertisement
time
 will be wasted during watching news on television.
Next
, young people should have
company
Suggestion
the company
 of like minded people who are always aware of current affairs. If
this
 is followed personal interest will be built and will follow reading or seeing
news
Suggestion
the news
. Mobile phones or tablets can
also
 be used for getting aware of current affairs, I think that will be the best option anyone can opt.
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