These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, it has been observed that more and more families are migrating to other countries for jobs and a better life.
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, some people think that
this
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shifting can make
lives
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the lives
of children troublesome while others deny saying it is more beneficial. In my opinion, the benefits are more
compared
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comparable
to the problems.
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with, families relocating to another country for jobs do have some detrimental effect on the lives of their children.
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, children have to leave their friends and relatives with whom they are
attached deeply
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attached, deeply
, and so they feel isolated sometimes when they miss their friends back in their own country.
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, these offspring are new to the environment where that
have
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has
to start fresh.
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, they need to cope up with studies of the new school. A child,
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, has to learn and understand new subjects, and there will be pressure on him to learn them quickly.
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,
this
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negative impact will
last
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only in the initial period. Children do get adjusted
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for
situations easily. If children find issues in adjusting for some time, they can get support from their parents.
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changes
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change
is indeed advantageous for the offsprings to develop and grow in
better environment
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better environments
a better environment
. Learning different languages and cultures will help them to bond with the locals easily. It does enhance their intellectual abilities by getting more knowledge of other cultures.
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, a survey conducted by Bombay Times showed that children moving to other countries are 60% more intellectual than those staying in the same country. In conclusion,
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there are issues at the start of shifting like feeling lonely and getting along with peers and studies, the benefits like getting a better life for the future is considered to be fruitful.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

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