World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership.

Though some people argue that
war
and conflicts among nations and within a territory are impersonal regardless of men and women leaders, the history suggests that
world
Suggestion
the world
saw less violence,
war
and conflicts under female leaders. Considering
this
in in
mind I
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mind, I
suggest the idea that female leadership can be considered for a better world. The major World Wars, conflicts among nations, civil wars mostly caused by the male ego, assassinations and conflicts of interests among men. Very few female leaders contributed making decisions to have
war
with other nations in their period of ruling a country. Sometimes people often mention the Trojan
War
and convict a female as the main reason for
this
war
. But the fact is, it is not even a historically approved
war
Suggestion
the war
and its root lies more in mythology than in evidence. And even if it was true, female leaders were not even remotely involved deciding to start the
war
. Though the number of male rulers throughout the history is much more compared to the number of female leaders and very few major wars could be related to the decision or action taken by women. Women are naturally mild-hearted and avoid conflicts and wars by all means. They are more caring and less violent by their prototypes and that makes them better leaders in terms of serving people. The leader who is caring and has the mentality to serve people would naturally be a good leader and women are better candidates than men in
this
regards. In summary, the idea of female leadership in terms of avoiding
wars
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war
and serving nations better is indeed a good idea.
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