in some countries ,children under 16 years old are not allowed to leave school by law and get full time work is this a good or bad thing?discuss your opinion.

many
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Many
school
laws are very
strice
suffering severe physical strain or distress
stressed
in some countries
.
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.
nowadays
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Nowadays
,
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,
in some countries
,
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,
student
under 16 years old are not allowed to leave
school
by laws and get full
time
work
.
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.
it
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It
is a good thing.
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
will explain my viewpoints in upcoming paragraph.
it
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It
is a good thing because under 16 years old
student
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students
are not
interest
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interested
in their studies while children interest in outdoor and indoor activities
then
they go to play games.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
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,
connect with
stranger
being definitely out of the ordinary and unexpected; slightly odd or even a bit weird
strange
people and go for a difficult situation.
for
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For
instance, people kidnap children for earning money.
that
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That
is why it is a good for under 16 years old to not
allowed
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allow
to leave
schoolby
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school by
law and get full
time
studies.
in
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In
some countries, students cannot leave
school
without the
premmission
approval to do something
permission
promotion
of
teachers
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the teachers
because teachers are the
responsible
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responsibility
of
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for
children
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child
child's
children's
saftey
the state of being certain that adverse effects will not be caused by some agent under defined conditions
safety
while children enter into the
school
,
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,
then
teachers take responsibility of every
student
.
then
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Then
, many countries make law for the
school
owners.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
, under 16 years old students go for the wrong path because children do not know the difference between good or bad,
for instance
,
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,
people tell kids to take
liquior
an alcoholic beverage that is distilled rather than fermented
liquor
,
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,
they
also
do
this
because children
doesnot
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does not
know
this
is not good for their health.
after
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After
this
,
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,
in many
countries
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country
schoolprovide
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schools provide
school provide
identity cards to parents to
pickup
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pick up
their
childern
a young person of either sex
children
for
school
with their instruction.
that
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That
is why the laws are good for children.
in
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In
my opinion, every
countries
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country
make
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makes
their own laws for students because
school
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the school
take
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takes
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
responsibility for full
time
work.
they
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They
are not allowed
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have not allowed
do not allow
don't allow
leave
schoolduring
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school during
mid day.
to
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To
conclude,
student
under 16
yeears
a late time of life
years
old are not allowed to leave
school
by laws and get full
time
studiesbecause
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studies because
school
take responsibility of all students.
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