in some countries ,children under 16 years old are not allowed to leave school by law and get full time work is this a good or bad thing?discuss your opinion.

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suffering severe physical strain or distress

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in some countries

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student

under 16 years old are not allowed to leave

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time

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is a good thing.

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is a good thing because under 16 years old

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students

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connect with

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people and go for a difficult situation.

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the teachers

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, under 16 years old students go for the wrong path because children do not know the difference between good or bad,

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people tell kids to take

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my opinion, every

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makes

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studies because

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in some countries ,children under 16 years old are not allowed to leave school by law and get full time work is this a good or bad thing?discuss your opinion.

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