Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether the success of an individual is determined by parents' way of upbringing, or other circumstances lay at the base of it, is a controversial topic. While, many people think that a person could achieve success only by receiving a good parental

education

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, I

wholeheardely

without reserve; without reservation

wholeheartedly

believe that

school

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the school

plays a pivotal role and is

responsabile

worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable

responsible

for

children's level

Suggestion

the children's level

of achievement.

To begin

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, many people agree with the statement for some noteworthy reasons. The most remarkable is that parental guidance is

essencial

absolutely necessary; vitally necessary

essential

essentially

for getting

dismiss from the mind; stop remembering

forgetting

an important career in life as children spend the majority of time at home.

For

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example

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, parents pave the way of their children and guide them

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choosing proper choices. Another reason is that parents support their children with financial resources and

emotioal

determined or actuated by emotion rather than reason

emotional

as well.

For instance

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, all the university fees and living expenses are paid by parents.

However

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, their

education

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fade

Suggestion

fades

in comparison to academical

education

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Nevertheless

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, there are some advocates that argue school is far more important than the

education

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given to children by parents.

Firsty

preceding all others in time or space or degree

First

Firstly

, professors teach crucial lessons that every time come in useful later in life.

For

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example

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, children learn to write and read at school.

Therefore

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, it contributes

definetely

without question and beyond doubt

definitely

to reaching success.

Secondly

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, kids learn various subjects during academical lessons.

As a result

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, they find out quickly what they like and what they are good at. The best

example

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, is my sister who has become a well-known singer in my hometown due

in the direction of

her tutor who discovered her talent and encouraged her to pursue a career. All in all, when all specific reasons and relevant

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example are

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example, are

considered and evaluated, I

storngly

with strength or in a strong manner

strongly

agree that tutors are of great significance when it comes to becoming successful when children are

fully

Suggestion

full

-grown.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

288 words

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