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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Language
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 is the best means of communication. In the modern globalization
era it
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era, it
 is not enough to be able to speak
one
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language
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 to communicate with the outside world. I strongly support the idea that infants should begin enrolling a foreign
language
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 as soon as they start education. They faster become familiar with a strange
language
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, improve their hearing ability to understand new words as time goes by and learn new words. In the following paragraphs I will list some reasons to support my position.
First
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 of all, if
one
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 wants to see outcome soon,
one
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 must start sooner. So,
the early
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the earlier
 children begin to learn
new
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a new language
new languages
language
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 the better will be the result. Scientists say that a child does not confuse two different
languages but
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languages, but
 learns them
more effectively
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most effectively
.
For example
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, In India every province has its own official
language
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 with diverse cultures. But most of the people prefer to speak in
hindi
the most widely spoken of modern Indic vernaculars; spoken mostly in the north of India; along with English it is one of the main official languages of India; usually written in Devanagari script
Hindi
 and
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 languages.
However
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, it is vital that
adolscents
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
 should learn these two languages with their mother tongue.
Second
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 of all, Adults are often
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 afraid to make mistakes when they are speaking in a new
language
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.
This
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 fear is
one
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 of the biggest
barrier
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barriers
 for a person in his efforts to speak freely.
Otherwise
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, kids do not
affraid
filled with fear or apprehension
afraid
 of making grammatical mistakes because they just repeat words and
sentenses
a string of words satisfying the grammatical rules of a language
sentences
sentence
 in the way they hear them. They faster get used to the right
pronumciation
the manner in which someone utters a word
pronunciation
 and better feel the
meoldy
a succession of notes forming a distinctive sequence
melody
 of
language
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. To sum up, I think that it is very essential for children
to begin
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 learning a foreign
language
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 in their early ages. It
is brings
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brings
has brought
is bringing
 many benefits
such
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 as great pronunciation.
Also
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, it
help
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helps
 a child develop and gain more knowledge which is good for a long run.
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