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When designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#factor #appearance
Design is one of the most important aspect in the construction of
building
Suggestion
buildings
the building
a building
.While designing a
building some
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building, some
 people believe that the purpose of the building is more important than the external
appearance
.I partially agree to
this
 and in
this
 essay will explain the details. The purpose of the building will be the prime factor in design.
This
 contributes to the effective design of
building
Suggestion
the building
buildings
 where we have to consider the
facilites
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
 we require and how much space is required for the each facility.
for
Suggestion
For
 example, while designing an IT park, leaving space for assembly point in case of emergency is more important than decorating the space with
fountain
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fountains
a fountain
.
However
, external
appearance
also
 plays a major role in
design
Suggestion
the design
. Having a good looking building will attract more customers into it.
Eventhough
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Even though
 customer consider the facilities provided by the building, outward
appearance
 will be the
first
 thing that
bring
Suggestion
brings
 customers to enquire about the building.
In addition
 to that, there is famous quote "Face is the index of mind"
,
Accept space
,
 which portrays the importance of external
appearance
. In summary,
although
 the purpose of the building is an important factor is designing
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 feel that an equal importance
should
Suggestion
Should
 be given for building
appearance
also
.
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