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Air travel causes environmental pollution, so many people believe that there should be an increase in the price of air tickets in order to reduce air traffic. Do you agree or disagree?

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The salad days of
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third millennium
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the third millennium
has seen
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have seen
 a prolific increase in people who
travel
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 by
air
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.
Consequently
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, there has been a view that
air
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travel
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 increases environmental pollution.
Although
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 there are
few arguments
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a few arguments
 in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of hiking the price of airline tickets in order to reduce
air
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 traffic, I am of the opinion that there are much better ways to tackle
this
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 problem.
To begin
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, one of the main arguments of the proponents of
increase
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the increase
 in
airplane
a hose that carries air under pressure
airline
 tickets is that
this
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 may hinder people from flying very often.
However
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, I believe
this
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 argument does not stand up to scrutiny as there are clear evidences to suggest that those consider
air
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travel
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 as a
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 means of transportation belong to the upper class of the society and a small hike in
air
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 tickets does not make any difference in their choice. At the same time,
this
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 might have a huge impact on students and job seekers who resort to
air
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travel
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 out of necessity and which is not fair.
On the other hand
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, there are many possible ways to reduce the number of
air
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travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
. The most alternative is that the government could improve public transportation for longer distance to encourage frequent
air
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travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 to give up flying.
For instance
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, in Japan
,
Accept space
,
 the preferred choice of transportation of people is bullet trains that
travel
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 at the speed 350 to 400 kilo meters per hour and the Japanese barely
travel
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 by
air
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.
In addition
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 to that, these trains run cleaner energy
such
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 as nuclear,
therefore
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 do not pollute our
air
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. To conclude, while some people strongly argue that an increase in the price of flight tickets could result in decreased
air
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 traffic, I am unconvinced of the effect of
such
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 strategy as it seems to me that there are much better ways to do so.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental pollution
  • deterrent
  • aviation technologies
  • disproportionately affect
  • global carbon tax
  • alternative solutions
  • tourism-dependent economies
  • cleaner fuels
  • efficient flight paths
  • carbon emissions
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