Many office authorities impose a restriction on smoking within the office premises. Some governments have even banned smoking in all public places. This is a good idea but it takes away some of our freedom. What are your opinions on this?

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A majority of work places enforce a strict guideline within their compound. The elected state in several areas has

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prohibited smoking

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private places.

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happens to be a great idea but I strongly disagree that a step like

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would reduce the right to practice one's freedom.

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essay will focus on highlighting the causes to support my opinion. The primary two reasons are smoking, being a choice and the damage incurred by passive smokers.

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, to smoke or not is an individual's personal decision. Just because anyone wants to smoke, it does not mean that the other has to bear the brunt of it. When a person

is smoking

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smokes

in office or any other public place, everyone around can smell it; not everyone is comfortable with the

odor

any property detected by the olfactory system

odour

order

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emitted.

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, if the question is based on someone's personal approach,

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every single person's thought who happen to be affected by it, need to be considered.

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, a recent study by Columbia University shows that 55% of the working population agree that they would prefer working in an office which does not allow smoking.

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, all public places are accessible to everyone. Some people might be allergic to the smoke. If the bureaucracy does not make a law to curb smoking. Smokers can start smoking at all the available areas which are

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in turn

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open to the entire population and

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, resulting in the

inconenience

an inconvenient discomfort

inconvenience

for non smokers.

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, an independent survey revealed, that a staggering 72% of families prefer going to the restaurant that does not admit smokers.

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, re-iterating the fact that

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the majority

of the people would be in support of

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a ban. In conclusion, I believe that putting restrictions on smoking

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common places and the working institutions is a progressive decision and

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, would certainly not interfere with the personal freedom of anyone.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

314 words

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