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these days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. explain why you this change has happened. what are the effects of this change in attitude?

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 with, people are more attracted to advertisements made by various industries, so they tend to throw away old items to replace new ones.
For example
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, if a new product is released in the electronics sector, people would prefer to replace them with the latest product. In the past
it
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It
 was a different scenario where one used to repair the damaged item. Another reason that fashion is changing the market in different ways. They are releasing the products with lower quality which lasts only for
few days
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a few days
.
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, in the past furnitures were designed
to
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for
with
 long lasting whereas now it is less than that.
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 to that, there are many adverse effects on people and the environment. People tend to attract to the advertisements.
As a result
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, they are replacing old items and throwing.
This
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creats
make or cause to be or to become
creates
a
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an
 environmental issue where waste is increasing year by year. A professor at the university of Melbourne says "30% of the waste generated by people is not possible to recycle because of the plastic materials used in it".
This
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 is a huge change from
past
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the past
. In conclusion, these days we tend to replace old things rather than repairing them. In
this
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 process we lost our skill of keeping priced possession and
consequently
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 damaging the environment.
the
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The
 environment.
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