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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart
graph
 illustrates
growth
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the growth
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 number of
japon
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Japon
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citizen
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citizens
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 every five years until 2055
while
, the table compares
over
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the over
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 65 years old
population
 and
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
total
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the total
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population
 between 1950 and 2055. A glance at the graphs reveals that
japon
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Japon
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population
 growth increased
2005
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in 2005
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.
According to
first
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the first
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graph
, the
population
 is falling in 2055. The
japon
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Japon
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population
steadly
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steadily
 soared from 84.1
millon
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million
 to 127 billion which the
population
recieved
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received
a
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the
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 highest point of capacity. After following one decade, the citizen number decreased
gradual
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gradually
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 decrease to
reached
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reach
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 125.4
millon
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million
.
According to
graph
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the graph
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 prediction that the
population
 will lose
huge
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a huge
the huge
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 number of
citizen
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citizens
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 until 2055 which is 89.9 million
people
.
Moreover
, the
graph
 table
unearth
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unearths
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a comparision
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comparision
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comparison
Comparision
 of
older
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the older
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population
between
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and between
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 total
population
. between 1950 and 2035 , the elder
population
 rise sharply,
then
 there will be reached highest
geriatric
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number of geriatric
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people
 in 2055
while
, the
population
 will reduce significantly in
same
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the same
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 years. in short,
japonies
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Japanese
 elder
people
 will cover the majority of
population
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the population
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 in the future. The elder
people
has
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have
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effect
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an effect
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 on
unfavourable
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the unfavourable
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 growth of
population
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the population
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, population, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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