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These days people in some country are living in a "throw-away" society which mean people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays there is an increasing trend where most people
uses
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use
 things only for a shorter period of
time
 and throws it away. In
this
 essay I will explain about the causes, problems and
solution
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solutions
 to resolve
this
 issue. People are attracted towards the new
techonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
technologies
.
Techonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
Technology
 keeps improving at a faster
rate which
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rate, which
 demands people to be
upto
-date with the products they use.
For example
, Every month there comes a new version of the mobile phones with advanced features which forces people to buy version.
In addition
 to that, advertisement influences the people to buy things which they
do not need
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did not need
 at that
time
 or expensive. Earlier days, we used to see advertisements only
in
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on
 the radio, the television and the
newspapers but
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newspapers, but
 now with the advancement of technology, advertisements reached our mobile phones through messages or pop up notifications. Scientists were in search of a solution for an effective waste management. People using things for a shorter period of
time
 may result in the creation of an enormous waste. Dumping the waste may pollute the air and water resources and may lead to new disease.
Additionally
, manufacturing new products might utilize the major part of our valuable resources.
For example
, a car manufacturing company might utilize million
liters
a metric unit of capacity, formerly defined as the volume of one kilogram of pure water under standard conditions; now equal to 1,000 cubic centimeters (or approximately 1.75 pints)
litres
 of water per day. Government should create awareness among people about the problems created by one
time
 usage of products and throwing it away. It should amend laws to make people use the things for a longer period.
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