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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals believe that the adolescent
life
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 brings more enjoyment, while others think that
adulhood
the period of time in your life after your physical growth has stopped and you are fully developed
adulthood
 is the happiest time.
Although
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adult
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life
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 can give more financial freedom, I believe that
teenage years
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the teenage years
 are
more happier
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happier
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of the less responsibilities. On the one hand, people think that
adult
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life
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 is filled with happiness because of their income, despite the greater responsibility.
That is
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 to say, they will be able to spend money on purchasing things and pleasure activities without depending on anybody else.
For example
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, a recent government survey showed 60% of the working people are happy with
thier
of them or themselves
their
 lives because of the financial stability they have.
However
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, I believe that the adults have more commitments which sometimes may cause stress and health problems.
On the other hand
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, many say that teenage years
brings
Suggestion
bring
 more contentment because of the fewer responsibilities.
In other words
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, young
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 have more freedom and time to
hangout
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hang out
 with friends, watch movies and much more.
Further
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, their daily expenses are taken care
by
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of
 their parents and are free from tension related to money.
For instance
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, research conducted by the Times showed that 70% of people are
are
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being
 more joyful in their teenage days than they are now. I believe that
this
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 thought of school is
apropriate
suitable for a particular person or place or condition etc
appropriate
inappropriate
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 teenagers have less burden. In conclusion,
although
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adult
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 years is free from money concerns, the joy and
happiness
Suggestion
Happiness
 is more in teenage
life
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 due to fewer responsibilities. It is pridicted that by 2025, 20% more
adult
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 persons will suffer from anxiety due to their family burden
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