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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two line table
compare
Suggestion
compares
britian
a monarchy in northwestern Europe occupying most of the British Isles; divided into England and Scotland and Wales and Northern Ireland; 'Great Britain' is often used loosely to refer to the United Kingdom
Britain
 children
sport
 activity between spending
money
 and
number
 of children whose
pereferences
a strong liking
preference
 of
sport
 activity. A glance at the graphs reveals that attraction of all sports branch
steadly
at a steady rate or pace
steadily
 increased by years, while supporting fees of the sports significantly rise too. The
first
 graphs illustrate spending
money which
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money, which
 ranged
by
Suggestion
from
 10 to 40 million
pound
Suggestion
pounds
. It is clearly seen that the
money
 support was soaring from 2008 to 2014. As spending
money
 was 20
millon
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
million
pound
Suggestion
pounds
 in 2008, the support was
dramaticly
in a very impressive manner
dramatically
rise
Suggestion
rising
durin
all the way through
during
 the six following years which was reached over the 30
millon
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
million
 pounds. The
second
 line diagram shows
attraction
Suggestion
the attraction
 of
sport
 branches as
number
 of children.
the
Suggestion
The
 most favourable
sport
 is
footbal which
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football, which
football which
 was over 7.5 million
person
Suggestion
people
persons
.
Accept space
.
Moreover
, athletics
was drawing
Suggestion
were drawing
wave line
Suggestion
a wavy line
wavy line
 on according to graph. Albeit following the low
number
 of capacity, it could
beated
come out better in a competition, race, or conflict
beat
 swimming
number
 in 2011.
However
, the
athlets
Suggestion
athlete's
number
slightly fall
Suggestion
slightly falls
 until 2014. The swimmer
number
 was increased
steadly
at a steady rate or pace
steadily
 during in 6 years. In short all
number
Suggestion
numbers
 of branches was growth.
Thus
, the spending of
money
 rose by parents.
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